Hey (Peer’s Name)! I really enjoyed reading your essay. It was really well written, and the topic itself is something I want to learn more about. One thing I particularly enjoyed about your writing style was your paragraph structure. You knew exactly when to end each paragraph and begin a new one, keeping your writing thorough yet concise. I also appreciated that you had mini conclusions after writing about each source because it refreshed me on what the article was about so that I could completely absorb the information you provided. One thing I would make sure to include however, is inserting in-text citations into your paragraphs including the author’s name and page/paragraph numbers (if applicable). You pulled such relevant evidence from your sources and I think that would strengthen it even more. Another thing I would include is a paragraph that compares and contrasts the different genres or mediums in depth. You briefly mentioned that the informal sources (the TikTok and the Vox video) were more biased than the newspaper and scholarly sources. This is a great start and I completely agree, but I think your argument would be stronger if you added more comparisons. Great job (Peer’s Name)!